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TIMESTAMPS:
0:00 - Intro
1:07 - Are there any familiar phrases or cliches?
1:51 - Do we ever lose the character's body/senses?
2:39 - Can we see faces and bodies?
3:18 - Is there any unnecessary non-linearity?
4:00 - Are there any unnecessary details/actions?
4:40 - Is there any repeated description/detail?
5:04 - Could the verbs be stronger?
5:55 - Could the nouns be more specific?
6:28 - Are the voice and style consistent?
7:03 - Can the details be more specific/revealing?
7:49 - Are there any unnecessary similes?
8:21 - Are there any illogical constructions?
8:48 - Could the punctuation create between flow/tension?
9:33 - Do paragraphs have a clear sense of flow?
10:04 - Are there any sentences that need to be read twice?
10:42 - Is there anything you don't like?
FAQS
→How old are you? - 25
→How long have you been writing? - Since I was 8
→Where do you live? - I keep that private for safety reasons, but I grew up in Vancouver.
→Where did you go to university and what did you study? - I keep my university information private, but I majored in writing with a concentration in fiction.
→What are your pronouns? - They/them or she/her
→Where can I read your books? - None of my books are published yet, but you can read my published short fiction in my linktree (linked above!)
→So when will your book be published? - I don’t know! I’m in the revision process right now, but I can’t predict exactly when I’ll have a book published. But I’m working on it!
→Do you plan to traditionally publish or self publish? - Traditionally publish
→Will you read my book/story/chapter/mentor me? - Unfortunately I cannot accommodate these requests because editing/critiquing is a labour intensive task that I can’t afford to do for free alongside my job, my own writing, and running this platform. If you would like to hire me for paid editing work, contact me privately on twitter or instagram.
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