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In my four-part series, I'm going to show you the 20 most common mistakes you're making that stops you from achieving the coveted Band 7 in Writing Task 2. In Part 4, I'll show you the most commonly made mistakes in the conclusion.
Now here is the Band 7 version:
“Prior to the advent of globalisation, the majority of the workforce were employed in small-scale organisations. In this day and age however, it has become increasingly more common that they are employed by multinational companies. Despite the strengths of this development such as career growth and stability, the weaknesses of high competition and a toxic workplace should also be taken
into consideration.
Although there are multiple benefits of working in a larger organisation, the main benefit is that there are ample opportunities for career growth. It is commonly known that entry-level employees have higher prospects of promotions to managerial levels as opposed to working at a smaller company. Furthermore, because larger organisations offer employees more stability, they are more likely to withstand external economic fluctuations. When the pandemic began, for example, many people working in larger corporations were more immune to any job losses as the company was able to absorb the fluctuations in the marketplace. Those that worked in sole-proprietor companies, however, were less immune.
Nonetheless, larger corporations are not without some flaws. Firstly, if an employee is not a go-getter, and prefers instead to work quietly behind the scene, they may be more inclined to be overlooked when promotions are awarded. Larger corporations hire hundreds or even thousands of employees, therefore, it is easy to be ignored when a promotion opportunity arises. In addition, because of this competitive environment, it can create a toxic workplace. Larger corporations are more prone to gossip and office politics, which can be a by-product of the fierce competition between employees. The behemoth American company Amazon, for instance, has recently been under the spotlight with accusations of harassment and discrimination from upper management and amongst co-workers.
To conclude, even though working in a major corporation has the benefits of career advancements and job security, the drawbacks of stiff competition amongst workers and working in a toxic workplace should also be taken into consideration. Perhaps, it is wiser to experience both types of establishments and then choose the perfect fit.”
